There was once the Girl who imagined a life of happiness. Girl had always been fascinated with the idea of love and all the beautiful things it was associated with. She looked up to her parents and saw the happiness they had on the daily. She had always wanted to find the perfect boy, who could sweep her off her feet. Girl was seventeen when she met Boy, and she thought this was it. Everything started off as a fairytale, literally. The flowers, gifts, the perfect dates, it was all there. Words have a powerful role when it comes to love, but actions speak louder than those words. Over time, those actions began to change from the words she was receiving. The idea of that romantic love began to slip away, as manipulation and distrust began to creep in. As time went on, everything became more and more dark. Girl was left vulnerable and all alone, while Boy and the romantic idea of love ran away. The fairytale love was over and Girl realized relationships aren't meant to be like the movies. Love doesn't work like that, it's raw and real. Girl then realized, that young love wasn't meant to last. At least for the most part. There can be imposters, fakes, and even just other people who are as lost as you. And even sometimes, the love was real, it just wasn't the right timing. As people grow in life, they inevitably change. Love you have can change, it can grow, or it can disappear. There are different types of love, from family, friends, and life partners. They all have one thing in common though. Love should be trusting, but also independent. Through all the issues of life, love was just like everything else. Seemingly impossible until you find your true Golden Deer.
Author's Note: I took the story of The Golden Deer and turned it into a hopeless romance story. The Golden Deer is represented in my story as the idea of love and the tricks it can play on the mind. Sita is represented by "girl" in my story, as I wanted this story to be more abstract rather than assign character names. On the same level, Rama and Lakshman's roles in this story are combined to create the idea of "boy". Other than those aspects, I went more or less off base from the original story.
Source:
The Golden Deer by Sister Nivedita
(Red Rose:
pixabay)
Hey Anna!
ReplyDeleteCool story this week! I really liked this big twist on the golden deer story from the Ramayana.
I did wonder about your writing style though. The use of "Girl" and "Boy" as the names of the main characters was really intriguing, especially when you started sentences as "Girl/Boy was..." It was technically grammatical, but it also had a kind of off-putting feel, which really helped to lead into your ending. But the writing in general also seemed a little offputing, and I wasn't sure if it was intentional. Even in the beginning with phrases like "the Girl" (maybe just use 'a Girl') or "on the daily" (should probably be just 'daily') or "actions speak louder than those words" (this was weird because 'actions speak louder than words' is such a well-known phrase that changing it all seems strange), I consistently felt the wordings were a little strange. If that was intentional, then good job because it really made me read everything carefully!
Overall though the premise and stylistic choices of the names were both really cool and made for a great story!
Hi Anna!
ReplyDeleteI thought it was very interesting how you took the gender names and used them as the actual names of the characters. I think every little girl can relate to Girl-- growing up and dreaming of the perfect life which the perfect man. In your author's note, I would consider adding a more thorough summary of the original story. The reader can utilize this easier, rather than having to the entire original story. Great work, and I can't wait to read more!